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Instead of requiring primary school students to do experiments themselves, schools should only alllow them to watch experiments demonstrated by teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays
schools
 are an important role in student's life
while
 they learning,either state boards,government
schools
 or CBSE standard
schools
 are following the same standards in teaching.In
schools
 particularly primary
students
 are not allowed to do experiments themselves,only they were allowed to watch the experiments explained by the teachers.Let us see these through my eyes. The valuable part of schooling is the primary level which
children
 could able to learn a lot about science and other subjects.For,instance the mentor explains a simple electricity theory by connecting the positive and negative probes to the conductor which will produce electricity to glow the LED lights connected with another end of the probe.Some
children
 could able to understand science easily but others are not.,
Certainly
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 I believe that practical
knowledge
 is very important than theoretical study. ,
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Moreover
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 the
students
 were not allowed to do any kind of experiments
due to
 the fact of security and concern about their safety measures.
Although
 safety is a vital role in school same as
knowledge
 of
students
 is
also
 very important to an institution's growth.At the beginning of the primary subject , the kids were very enthusiastic to learn new things very easily and observe quickly.The
children
 must need to learn safety measures before they do the experiment themselves.
Finally
, in my ,opinion wisdom is power. The precious thing that could be given to our
children
 was practical
knowledge
 than paper-based study.When the
students
 do themselves they were getting new thoughts and innovative ideas in their brains which is really needed for our society and significant growth in the research field.I totally support and disagree with the above statement and the
students
 should be allowed to do the projects on their own to explore the
knowledge
to conclude
 my essay.
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