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advantages and disadvantages of establishing a new university

The distance between the wealthy and the needy
people
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 is gradually rising
due to
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 the fact that the wealthy
people
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 are getting more wealth
whereas
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 the poor
people
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 are still in need of fulfilling their basic essentials. The
corruption
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 and lack of
education
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 in every sector of
society
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 can be the reason for
this
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 situation. Nowadays
corruption
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 has been integrated into every sector of our country. From the lowest sector to the high corporate or government office,
corruption
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 spreads its wings like a bird. If
people
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 who get the chance to do well for
others
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 keep engaging in
corruption
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, there will be no development in our
society
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.
Therefore
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 underprivileged
people
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 will continue to get deprived of their basic
rights
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on the contrary
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 the privileged ones will devour all the advantages of
society
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. Again lack of institutional and moral
education
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 is one of the basic requirements for
people
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 to understand
about
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their
rights
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 and responsibilities. If
people
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 had more moral knowledge, they would not have ruined the
rights
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 of
others
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.
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, if poor
people
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 get the right to proper
education
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 they will not let
others
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 take away what is rightfully theirs.
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 why
education
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 plays a very significant role in breaking the societal wrong hierarchy.
To sum up
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, we can say that, corrupted
people
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 and their lack of moral understanding lead them to the way of depriving
others
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 of their
rights
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. Measures should be taken to remove
corruption
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 from the roots of
society
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. Only
then
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 it will be possible to eradicate the difference between the two sides of
society
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.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadening horizons
  • cultural awareness
  • adaptability
  • specialized courses
  • top-tier educational programs
  • independence
  • self-reliance
  • language acquisition
  • global network
  • financial burden
  • homesickness
  • cultural shock
  • social isolation
  • educational systems
  • teaching styles
  • language barriers
  • academic performance
  • visa restrictions
  • employment opportunities
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