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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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It is certainly true that
overpopulation
 in cities over the
last
 few years has already caused several issues,
this
 essay will discuss some of them and put forward several solutions to tackle these problems.
Overpopulation
 in urban
areas
 can lead to many problems,
for instance
, traffic congestion, an issue that almost every metropolis in the world suffers from it, when individuals migrate from all over the country to the capital city, it gets overcrowded;
therefore
, traffic congestion becomes inevitable.
Moreover
, when a lot of people decide to settle down in one particular area, obviously, its resources will be in higher demand, more than they used to be, like
for example
, job opportunities,
although
 there are plenty of corporates in urban
areas
, the rate of unemployment is always high, mainly
due to
overpopulation
.
Government
 should make a plan of action to tackle these issues, and the obvious solution would be to invest more in the rural
areas
 where
in contrast
 to most cities, they suffer from a lack of population,
government
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the government
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 has to convince big corporates to build their factories in rural
areas
 and simultaneously build roads and other facilities to make it easier.
On the other hand
,
government
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the government
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 should encourage individuals to settle down in the countryside by applying lower taxes and facilitating the obtaining of loans for people who will live there in the future.
To conclude
, there are various problems that
overpopulation
 can cause in the future, and
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the government
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government
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governments
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along with
 individuals should take steps to tackle these issues.
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