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Is music really something vital in humans life? Give your opinion

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Music
 is an important part of something very present in
people
's daily lives.
While
 some consider it vital to help them to increase productivity and perform productivity serves as an accompaniment to perform tasks, and for others enjoy it as a hobby. Personally, I I personally believe that
music
 is essential in our lives, as it connects us to another world.
To begin
 with, when we listen to
music
 it is a moment of relaxation, either because you have just done something physical like sport or something psychological or mental like studying for many hours in a row. When you put the
music
 in your ears you only think about disconnecting from your efforts and being with yourself,
that is
 to say,
traveling
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to another world
while
 it is playing. Once it ends or you take it off, it is as if you were going back to work or to school because the moment the
music
 has ended you are reconnected to reality. If I were asked : what
music
 is for a person? From a musician's point of view, I would tell you that
music
 is not only about notes, rhythm, noise and disconnection.
Firstly
, for a person who plays an instrument and lives
music
, it is to be on a stage that would be like being in a house, and if
this
 is experienced by a group of musicians who live the same experience, it would be like being in the same house as a family.
Secondly
, for
people
 who don't play an instrument but listen to it and enjoy it, it is a way to meet and relate to other
people
, like
for example
 discotheques and concerts. In these spaces, we usually go with friends, but sometimes if you go alone you establish a relationship with the rest of the
people
 because you are sharing a unique moment and you are in tune with them.
Music
 is essential for
people
, sometimes it can be problematic because of lyrics and
music
 videos, but still, it generates discussions, opinions and arguments to try to improve society. In conclusion, I think
music
 is necessary for
people
 because it helps them to relate, argue and protest against the unjust.
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