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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastics do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem.

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Nowadays, the usage of
plastic
 has reached
to
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its
heighest
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highest
 point and damages the earth significantly. It is believed that
plastic
products
such
 as bags, bottles and packets are harmful
for
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the
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nature. In
this
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 I would like to discuss
about
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its repercussions and
masures
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measures
 to
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 it. To commence with, It is not degradable as other materials.
Therefore
, there are detrimental impacts of it on the whole ecosystem. Many people throw
the
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garbage in those polythene bags and animal tends to eat it which is very dangerous for their health.
majority
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 population of the world consume
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meat in their meals.
As a result
, we become prey
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 various diseases. It is reported in one of the articles that almost five
percentage
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 of humans
suffers
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 from
illness
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 that has no cure.
Hence
,
plastic
 is not suitable
to
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 us because of
above
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 reasons. There are many solutions the curb the issue. First of all, the
government
 should encourage its citizens to use biodegradable
products
.
Besides
, they should introduce strict laws against the usage of
plastic
.
Apart from
this
, factories should follow the regulations provided by the
government
. Companies should invest some money to make
an alternative
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alternative products
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products
 rather than
plastic
. Individuals should discourage the
sell
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 of
plastic
products
 and carry other alternatives.
Moreover
,
government
 and private companies should find
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ways to recycle
the
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plastic
 and reduce its usage.
To conclude
,
although
 there are many problem
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 with
the
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plastic
products
, individuals and companies can solve the issues with the help of
government
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the government
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.
Submitted by Neel Patel on

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