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Some people think that watching TV programmes can help children’s development while others disagree. What is your opinion?

#people #tv #programmes #children’s #development
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A few days without personal communications and going out Has anyone ever thought that we all would be locked in our own homes for a few days? I couldn’t believe that
possible
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 unless a quarantine began. Those enforced measures against the spread of
virus
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 were taken almost all over the world. That was the
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 everyone fully realized the importance of
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 communication and
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 of going out. The ordinary things we had always taken for granted became strictly forbidden and the most desirable with
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. A lot of people had to face
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 big challenge of being locked in their homes with their family members for a long
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. Others were struggling with getting used to
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 distantly. At the same
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, most of us felt cut off from our friends and favourite places to go, to say nothing about travelling.
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, the quarantine turned out some good points which we can benefit from now.
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 struggling with the new challenges we learnt how to work and study distantly. That has brought more freedom and
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time saving
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 to our life.
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, some companies don’t need to rent offices anymore, still keeping their employers working from home, and that
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 them money. Online shopping and delivery system developed so much, that it’s possible to get every little thing delivered at no
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 without any charge. I would like
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the English saying - every cloud has a silver lining. The things that scared us at the first sight one day might become a part of our everyday life.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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