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Most people these days prefer getting news online to reading newspapers or watching TV.  Do you think it is a positive development?

#people #news #newspapers #tv #development
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this
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word
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world
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 most of the
peolpe
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people
 prefer getting
news
in
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via
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the
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digital options
as
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such as
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internet
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the internet
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 or video like watching the
tv
,
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than
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then
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 buy a
news papers
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newspapers
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. Everyone
have
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 with us a telephone with
internet
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the internet
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 allows
to
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us to
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 watch what happen in
all
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word
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world
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, a lot of
family
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families
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 when they seat
on
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 the table for dinner
use
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 to turn on the
tv
 with the
news
.
i
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I
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belive
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believe
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 that the important
are
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be
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to be
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informated
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information
informed
 in anyways. First
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the telephone
is became
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becomes
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 an
extencion
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extension
 of
humans
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 arms, it is the faster way to check what happens in
other country
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another country
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, the
news
are
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is
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 directly and updated every minute.
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, I live in Australia far from my home city Rome with nine
hours
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 of
time
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 difference, if there weren't technological means
such
 as the Internet, I couldn't have the
news
 in
real time
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real-time
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. Another
furniture
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 in all homes
it
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apply
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is the
tv
, many people use the television as a source of daily
news
 updates,
it
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is
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is also kept
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also
 keep
company
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them company
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.
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,
of
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 American college study 7 American of 10 watching the
tv
 during lunch or dinner
this
 is the most entertainment at home.
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 my
granpa
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grandpa
 in his home
wacht
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watched
 every day the
tv
news
 every hour for
not
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lose
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losing
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nothing
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anything
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.
Additionally
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this
 is the future of the
informations
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information
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, the new generations will want to be updated on the
news
 in
real time
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.the new generation, it is no longer conceivable to wait for the next day to read
news
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the news
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, the day after the
news
 is already old
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