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In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extend do you think is a positive trand?

#people #hobby #trand
In my
opinion
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 shopping is important both past and now because, people need clothes,
meal
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meals
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 and
other thing
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another thing
other things
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 so that
more
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is more
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 vital.
In
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which
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apply
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if you live the world you provide basic
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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 but, sometimes habitats exaggerate
this
 situation
such
 as every day gives few hours for shopping.
last
 decade trade was
faundation
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foundation
action,
thus
nowdays
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nowadays
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this
 condition
change
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changes
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 to hobbies by
rich
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a rich
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 person .
Firtsly
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Firstly
 two centuries ago created a lot of
companys
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companies
 and these
changings
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changes
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 are
impact
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an impact
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to
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on
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the humans
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humans
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 brain. Shopping is
more
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a more
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relaxible
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relaxing
activities
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activity
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 especially for women traditionally
women
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women's
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 spare time on the market.
Nevertheless
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tradeing
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trading
 is anxiety because
have
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having
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 more clothes,
meal
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meals
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,
cars
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and cars
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center
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centre
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respectively that position is
produce
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to produce
producing
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undecision
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indecision
. Another reason is that shopping activities between people
to
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generate communication areas and if you will want to create contact
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with
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different
mans
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men
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 you choose those activities. Indeed
this
simple
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is simple
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 but actually always funny so that we go to
the a
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a
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 lot of
area
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areas
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 and
checking
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check
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 clothes , buy
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a meal
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meal
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meals
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, household things and enjoyable for us. In
coclusion
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conclusion
,
although
 there are good arguments for
human
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humans
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,
i
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I
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 would
mantain
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maintain
 that situation
helping
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by helping
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persons
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people
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 for
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a leusire
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leusire
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leisure
 time. My view is shopping
always
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is always
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 funny and will be more
reputition
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reputation
repetition
 next
a
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apply
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decades.Unfortunately
some
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in some
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 countries money is a problem as never choose goods and no shopping.
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