Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children grow up with wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this option?
There is
significant
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a significant
children
raised in rich and poor families. I agree with fact
that kids will less Add an article
the fact
money
are able to assess their childhood knowledge and manage better their adult life
.
Many rich adolescents don't understand real problems as everything was given to them easily. They did not need to fight for anything as unfortunately
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,unfortunately
money
resolved all their needs. Even though most children
with money
have access to better education like
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apply
for instance
private schools, it is not necessary
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necessarily
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for their
their
ready to face real Correct pronoun usage
them
life
by themself. In addition
, I believe that money
can give happiness and lots of material things, however
you cannot buy Add a comma
,however
life
experience.
There are many examples of children
from poorest
families that are very mature and can help others with their Correct article usage
the poorest
problem
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problems
more
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a force
force
to think Change the form of the verb
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how
to deal with certain situations as sometimes it is the only way to survive. Kids without lots of Change preposition
about how
money
are also
, independent and they rely on their productivity. Furthermore
, being able to deal with lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
money
as a child makes you want to fight for better
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a better
life
and at the same time they
are more self-motivated.
In summary, I agree with Correct pronoun usage
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fact
that Add an article
the fact
children
from poorest
families are more mature and Correct article usage
the poorest
activated
which means that they can solve any problems in adult Replace the word
active
life
. The kids growing up with wealthy parents don’t appreciate the power of money
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