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With increasing populations and ever-growing human centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?

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In the next fifty years, numerous nations will no longer have their natural uniqueness,
as a consequence
 of the population rising and a majority number of urban
centers
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. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the benefits of safeguarding these
areas
 and try to find
solutions
 to
this
 matter.
Firstly
, I will consider the positive sides of giving protection to the natural part of the landscape, and
secondly
, I will explain what are some
solutions
 to the over-population within these territories.
To begin
 with, all of these natural beauty spots represent a good resource for our planet.
In other words
, they give products like timber, water or soil to sustain the societies, especially the ones located in urban
areas
.
For example
, water is used to create hydroelectric power which produces energy for households and industries.
In addition
, natural beauty
areas
 host different endangered species which must be protected to avoid their extinction. One of the
solutions
 to
this
 problem is related to the point given above which is the safeguarding of wildlife through the establishment of protected
areas
. In fact, they will not only create a safe place to live for the animals but
also
 avoid the human actions of taking them down.
Furthermore
, governments should
also
 introduce laws to stop people from expanding cities, especially among territories with a particular uniqueness. In conclusion, natural beauty must be protected at all costs because of its big role in giving raw materials and power resources to our generation
as well as
 the next one.
Moreover
, humans must find the perfect
solutions
 in order to give more possibilities to our planet.
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