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Some people say that Government should break down all the historic building and replace them with modern buildings. Do you agree or disagree.

#people #government #buildings
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Historical places and
buildings
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 are the
country
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's heritage and no one can deny that they role an important part in every
country
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's history. Some people believe that government need to change these
buildings
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 to more developed and modern ones. In my point of view, I disagree with that opinion and the reason for
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 because we need these facilities to know about the past life of our
country
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. The purpose of
this
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 essay is to discuss why I am inclined to the importance of historical
buildings
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 and we have to keep them.
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,with the effects that old places have towards the citizens of the
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.
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, if a
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 had a war years ago
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 people wouldn't know about the tragedy that happened before without seeing the real place.
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, replacing them can result in losing the identity of the
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.
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, it can be argued that it may impact the touristy of the
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 as many tourists are travelling to see the historical industry to know more about the culture of
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country
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. A good example of
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 is provided by some countries
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 as Rome where it has the Pisa tower that every tourist would like to visit.It is equally important to recognise that one of the key reasons why the government shouldn't replace old
buildings
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 is
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 appearance of them they have a really unique shape and design. In the conclusion,
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everything that has been stated I would like to reiterate my opinion that historical
buildings
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 are part of the heritage and
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 everybody's responsibility to protect them at any cost.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invaluable assets
  • tangible connection
  • architectural heritage
  • modernization
  • energy efficiency
  • adaptive reuse
  • historical significance
  • economic implications
  • sustainable
  • green technologies
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