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A university education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree?

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There is no denying that
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a vital role in somebody’s future success.
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, I disagree that
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tertiary
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 should be free of charge. The first argument against a free
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education
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 is that if a
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education
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 were to be made free,
students
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 would likely take it for granted. Attending a free
university
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 means that
students
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 have nothing to lose if they do not take their academic life seriously. They might
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 end up devoting themselves to their academic life half-heartedly, which could eventually lead to them not becoming qualified graduates.
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, given that free
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 is frequently subsidized by governments,
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 would waste more money as it will not actually equip
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 with
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the qualifications
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 to get a job.
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, if
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 are obliged to pay for their
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education
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, they are more likely to take full advantage of it since they invest a great deal of money to obtain a degree. The second reason why
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university
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education
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 should not be made free to all
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 is
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 it can risk lowering the quality of the
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 itself.
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 a free
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education
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 means everyone will be given an equal opportunity to get a degree irrespective of their financial circumstances, they are less likely to experience high-quality
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.
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 is simply because universities need to earn a source of income to hire qualified
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, create well-equipped classrooms, provide reliable learning resources, regularly maintain
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buildings, and so forth. When confronted with a lack of funding, they have to remove some of the facilities or use cheaper resources to compensate for
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. Simply put, free
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 will be of poorer quality despite reaching
students
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 from a wider range of social-economic
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. In conclusion, not only will a free
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education
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 probably cause
students
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 to devalue the
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 itself, but it will
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 lead to universities not being able to maintain their highest standards. Having considered the drawbacks, I have no doubt that
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tertiary
education
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 should remain exclusive to those who can afford it.

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