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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table
illustrate
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 about revenue which got from Fair-trade
labeled
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labelled
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 coffee and
banana
 in
UK
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the UK
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,
Switzerland
,
Belgium
 and
Sweden
 in five years.
Overall
sales
 of coffee had
rosen
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risen
Rosen
 in all five countries during
given
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the given
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 period of time
while
 trading of
banana
were
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was
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 declined in 2 countries.
Firstly
, income from coffee
was
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increased from 1.5
millions
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 to 20
millions
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million
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 between 1994 to 2000
while
 it
was
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increased by 3
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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euros, 200000 , 700000 and 20000 euros in
Switzerland
, Denmark,
Belgium
 and
Sweden
 in order. The highest revenue of
cowas
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was
cows
 reported in
Switzerland
when
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while
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Sweden
 sold the lowest amount.
Secondly
,
sales
 of
banana
were
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drastically increased by more than 3 folds in
UK
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the UK
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 during
given
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the given
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 5 years by keeping
in
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the highest trader of
banana
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bananas
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 in all those years.
Amount
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The amount
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 of money earned from trading
banana
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bananas
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also
 rose
up
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in Denmark and
Switzerland
while
 it was fallen moderately in
Belgium
 and
Sweden
. Almost all the
sales
were
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increased
during
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from
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1994
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the 1994
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 to 2000 period of time except
few
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a few
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 reductions
of
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in
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banana
sales
 in
Belgium
 and
Sweden
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words banana, switzerland, belgium, sweden, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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