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Universities students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantage ?

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These days there is a growing number of university
students
 studying overseas to pursue their studies. I believe
this
 has more benefits than drawbacks. The disadvantage of
this
 issue is the distance
that is
 put between family members. If a person moves away it is true that air travel and devices
such
 as skype mean that communication and contact can be maintained.
However
, it is likely that a person will only be able to return one or two times a year during holidays, and speaking on skype or via email is not the same as face-to-face contact. Despite
this
, there are significant advantages it can bring to
students
' lives.
Firstly
, they have the opportunity to learn from the world's top education system and can bring their priceless knowledge to their countries.
For example
, if
students
 from poor countries go overseas and research studies or culture would bring them a lot of experience and would benefit their home country.
This
 enriches many
students
' lives as they get to learn about other languages, traditions, cultures and different ways of working and studying in their own country.
In addition
 to
this
, on a wider ,level it may
also
 benefit graduates to have an enormous career. With language skills and worldwide knowledge, one could build a firm future for themselves.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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