You are planning a short visit to a city where one of your relatives lives. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: 1) Explain when and how long you will be in town. 2) Ask whether you can stay at their home. 3)Offer to pay for yourself.

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Hi Emma, I hope you are doing well and enjoying your time there. I just want to let you know guys that I have done my exams and now I am planning to visit Jaipur next month on 20th December. Most probably, I will stay for 10 days as I am eagerly waiting for

this

moment and I am sure we will have fun together.

Finally

, my extremely imperative exam days are gone and now I am free for the next 3 months.

Also

, you know that I love Rajasthan culture

as well as

I love to enjoy historical places and of course, Jaipur has impeccable historical monuments and tremendous things to enjoy.

Moreover

, I know that you have a joint family but I don'

know anybody else in

this

town

therefore

, can I stay at your home.

Apart from

this

, You are local and it would be a great help as I don'

have much information about

this

city.

Furthermore

, I would like to pay for my stay as I don'

want to be burdened on your shoulders so, don'

worry about expenses.

Also

, we talked over the phone the day before yesterday and you told me that your uncle and aunt

also

came back from their business trip, and now they can

also

join us. I hope we will enjoy these precious moments. See you soon guys. Warm Wishes, Jasvir Kaur

Submitted by jasvir1012kaur on Thu Nov 28 2024

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coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea for better clarity.

task achievement

Provide more specific details or explanation for certain points, such as why you wish to pay for your stay.

coherence cohesion

The letter has a natural and warm greeting and closing, which adds a personal touch.

task achievement

The writing tone is friendly and appropriate for a letter to a relative.

task achievement

The writer clearly expresses the purpose of the visit and includes specific dates and duration, fulfilling the task requirements.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

233 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

anticipate
accommodation
arrive/depart
duration
itinerary
gracious hospitality
household
inconvenience
lodging
reimburse
temporary residence
travel arrangements
visit
warm welcome

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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In the future all cars, busses and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?