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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case ? Do you think is a positive or negative development?

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Recently, the invention of technology like
smartphones
 makes
children
 use their time mostly on their gadgets.
This
 may be because in their handphones they can do enjoyable activities
such
 as playing games and scrolling social media. I personally argue that
this
 action tends to have detrimental effects on
children
 because they can less of socialize
in
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 real life and imitate the negative contents of a smartphone.
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 of entertaining purpose is the most reasonable reason why offspring
also
 spend hours every day on their gadgets. On
smartphones
, they can install applications to play games and social media that make them happy with that.
For example
,
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scion
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 can spend a couple of hours in front of their screen playing a game since they can get happy when they do it. Another example
,
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 is when
children
 succeed to make new friends on Instagram is a delightful thing for them.
In addition
, they
also
 share their daily lives on social media
due to
 satisfaction.
However
, in my point of ,view it can have some negative effects for them to always use their smartphone. First of all, they tend to just focus on their screen and lack communication in their real life.
For instance
, so many
children
 avoid chit-chatting with their parents or friends and just stay in their bedroom the whole day because playing games is more interesting.
Secondly
, sometimes
children
 watch or look at un-appropriate content for their age because their parents can not supervise.
As a result
, they can copy and imitate it.
For instance
, some
children
 in schools commit assault actions to their friends. In conclusion,
although
smartphones
 can be a tool that gives entertainment effects for
children
, I believe that it will have more bad impacts on them
such
 as they just focus on their display and do bad actions in their life
as a result
 of imitating negative content on
smartphones
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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