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Some people say that Government should break down all the historic building and replace them with modern buildings. Do you agree or disagree.

#people #government #buildings
Nowadays, most
of
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historic
buildings
 are being replaced with modern
buildings
due to
 a plethora of reasons. I tend to disagree with
this
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 detail in the upcoming paragraphs. First and foremost is that local authorities are allocating more budget to renovating
historical
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building
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 from time to time, restoring historic
buildings
 is a vital job because it's connected with history and tradition.
For instance
, the historic building of Mysore Palace is the one of most attractive places in Karnataka, many tourists are more interested to come and visit a historic building which is benefits for country's economy indirectly.
Hence
, it's apparent why the government are giving importance to preserving historic
buildings
. Another factor to be considered is that architecture of the design building caught the eye, showing the creativity and talent of ancient designers,
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 some architects are investigating the interior of the historic building.
On the other hand
, some folks are not comfortable staying in historic
buildings
due to
 a lack of facilities, especially in the extreme temperature condition, they are finding so much difficult to stay in the accommodation.
Therefore
, destroying an old building and replace with modern architecture.Another example is that of the southern state temples in India, where each carving defines the artistic abilities of our creators. In recapitulation, I reiterate that there are innumerable strong factors supporting the government giving more importance to preserving the old building
instead
 of destructuring a modern building.
Consequently
, I firmly disagree with the given statement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invaluable assets
  • tangible connection
  • architectural heritage
  • modernization
  • energy efficiency
  • adaptive reuse
  • historical significance
  • economic implications
  • sustainable
  • green technologies
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