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Some children receive almost no encouragement from their parents regarding their performance at school, while other children receive too much pressure from their over enthusiastic parents which can have a negative impact on the child. Why do you think some parents put too much pressure on their children to perform well at school? What do you think the role of a parent should be in their child’s education?

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There is a
noticable
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noticeable
 fact that a group of
children
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 never get any praise from their
parents
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 for their excellent
result
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results
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 in school,
whereas
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 other
children
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 are always
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under
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 extensive
pressure
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 from their
parents
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 which brings some adverse impacts on them.
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unaware
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 of the negative consequences, some
parents
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 give excessive
pressure
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 on their
children
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.
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,
parents
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 should always
paly
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play
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 the supervisor role in a friendly way towards their
child
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’s education.
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 with, undoubtedly
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 and mother are the two
person
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, who cares the most for a
child
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.
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, sometimes not being realized the acceptance level of
pressure
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 of a
child
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,
parents
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 go beyond the limit.
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Additionally
, there is a strong belief among the
parents
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 that if they do not put some extra
pressure
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 on their offspring, they might get engaged in unwanted activities in school. So, imposing some strict rules on
children
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 will be beneficial for them which some
parents
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 firmly believe. For
instances
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, in Bangladesh, it is a common scenario where
parents
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 always keep several private tutors to keep them busy in
study
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.
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, putting extensive
pressure
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 on
children
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 can bring some
negetive
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negative
 impacts on them. Considering
this
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,
parents
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 should only play the supervisor role in their
child
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’s education. They should always discuss with them
while
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 imposing any new rule on them.
Besides
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,
parents
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 should keep the relationship in
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amicable
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 way so that a
child
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 never
hesitate
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 to ask for any suggestion from his
parents
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.
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, in developing countries, some programs are always organised by institutions to teach
gurdians
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guardians
 how to deal with their
children
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.
To sum up
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,
parents
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 put much
pressure
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 on their
children
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 without knowing the negative impacts.
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 should advise their
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child
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children
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 in
such
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 a friendly way that
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child
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the child
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 can fearlessly consult with them.
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