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Some people find advertisements amusing or annoying and they are not influenced by this when they shop. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

#people #advertisements #shop
It is claimed that customers are not manipulated by advertising when they shop. From my point of view, I agree that for some people advertising is not necessary.
However
, I
also
 believe that advertising still has an impact on shoppers. On the one hand, it is acceptable that there are a number of various reasons why buyers suppose advertising is unnecessary. The foremost cause is that some people may find it a waste of time when viewing advertisements.
Hence
,
instead
 of spending time watching advertising, they often spend time doing many other useful activities,
such
 as reading books or exercising.
Moreover
,
besides
 advertising, the price of goods has a great influence on customers’ shopping choices. In fact, if the buyer's financial resources are not enough, no matter how good the advertising is, they will not buy.
On the other hand
, I would argue that in some cases advertising can influence consumer buying psychology.
Firstly
, by using advertising, your products can be more easily accessible to consumers, and make them purchase decisions.
For example
, by collaborating with reviewers and running ads on the Tiktok platform, fashion shops have attracted a lot of purchasers and their revenue has increased significantly.
In addition
, thanks to advertising, consumers can discover many new products with useful information.
As a result
, consumers will have many purchasing choices that suit their needs. In conclusion,
although
 there are some people who are not affected by advertising, I suppose that advertising still has a certain impact on customers' purchasing decisions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumer behavior
  • Desensitization
  • Persuasive
  • Brand perception
  • Shopping habits
  • Marketing tactics
  • Selective attention
  • Online advertising
  • Traditional media
  • Cultural background
  • Ethical considerations
  • Ad saturation
  • Advertising literacy
  • Brand loyalty
  • Consumer skepticism
  • Target audience
  • Emotional appeal
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Impulse buying
  • Ad avoidance
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