you live in a room in college wich you share with another student. however there are many problems with the arrangement and you find its difficult to work

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my roommate. As you know we share one
place
, I can not study in the
place
at all any more if I still stay there. She always has friends visiting and having parties in the
place
. They make lots of noise and switch on the radio very loudly, for ,me
this
environment is very difficult to study
and
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I need a quiet
place
. Even
borrows
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borrow
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my things without asking, it is very impolite. I request you
can
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apply
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give me a new
room
next term because I have asked her
has
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if they have
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parties in other places many times they still have parties in the
room
. I really can not stay in the same
room
with her. I would be grateful if you could change me
a
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to a
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single
room
.
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Yours
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Your
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faithfully, Catherine
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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