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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate in percentage the
energy
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 consumption of electrical appliances in an average home in Australia and their resultant proportion of
gas
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emissions
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the highest amount of
energy
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 is used for heating and the largest proportion of greenhouse
gas
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emissions
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 comes from water heating. To commence with, the highest percentage of
energy
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 at 42 is used for heating and it is the third at 15% for
gas
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emissions
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. Heating water utilizes the second largest
energy
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.
However
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, it is by far the highest at 32% in the emission of greenhouse gases. Other appliances use 15% of
energy
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 and contribute about a little over a quarter in emitting carbon dioxide.
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, the emission of greenhouse gases from refrigeration and lighting is double the proportion of their
energy
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 usage at 7% and 2% respectively. Cooling accounted for just a little in
energy
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 consumption and
gas
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emissions
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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