The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate how
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and
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averagely spend money on health care, transport, food, housing and other services and goods in the year 2010.
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, health care was the least expenditure in both countries,
while
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housing,transportation, food and other goods and services were the most significant payments in
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given year. In comparison,
Japan
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allocated a considerable amount of fees for transport than
Malaysia
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.
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's housing expenses
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drain out cash by 21% and, experienced a more than 13% increase to 34% in
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. Expenses for food were 24% in
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and
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rose
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figure to 27%. Other goods and services were 29% of
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household
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and
Malaysia
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reduced it by almost a quarter out of all. It accounted for 26%.
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, in ,
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health care and transport remunerations were 6% and 20% respectively and
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spend half of that and it was 3% and 10% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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