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Student today can access the information online so libraries are not necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#student #access #information #libraries
It has been suggested that
students
 are getting higher grades because of google,
However
, books in
the
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libraries
iclude
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include
 more
information
 that can help them to study .I believe that
search
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searching
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 on google
more
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easier,
consequently
,
libraries
 are not essential.
This
 essay will
anlayise
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analyse
 why online
information
have
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 been
atrack
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attack
a track
track
 people, and why
libraries
 are important. It is often argued that
students
 are using their devices to access
googel
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google
, searching for figures is
more
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apply
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easier because
,
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apply
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 knowledge can be
showen
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shown
 in one minute,
that
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which
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 can save
alot
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a lot
time
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of time
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, and effort.
Furthermore
,
libraries
 have older materials than the
internet
,
therefore
, the
internet
 provides more timely
information
 because it is changing constantly. In the vast majority of
cases
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libraries
 have more accurate
information
 than the
internet
 as a
,
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 result
students
 can be more
knowladgeable
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knowledgeable
.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,
students
 can be more
fouces
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focuses
 when they are studying in the
libraries
,
However
,
sometime
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sometimes
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 they
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intrept
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interpret
interest
 by their electronic devices.
For example
, some
students
 like to search
about
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for
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somthing
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something
 on their computer so video games can attract them to play
instead
 of
studing
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studying
.
Moreover
, online
information
reqaired
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requires
internet
 and electronic devices
that
is
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are
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 really expensive and, some
students
uncapable
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incapable
 to buy
it
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them
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. In
conclosion
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conclusion
, I
beleive
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believe
 the benefits of online
informations
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information
pieces of information
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 are more than the
drawbackes
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drawbacks
drawback
.
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