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You have recently started working in a new company. write a letter to your friend. In your letter Explain why you changed job discribe your new job tell him/her about other news

#company #friend #job #discribe #news
Dear Aman, Hope you are doing well. It's been a long time
that
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 we haven't met
with
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each other. I received your letter asking about my current work experience. I'm very happy to discuss
about
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my new occupation with you. Actually, I was not satisfied
from
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 my old
job
 as it was
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a
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restaurant work where I had a lot of stress of doing multitasks
within
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very
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 less amount of money. So, after working
few
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 months with them, I
quiet
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quit
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 the
job
.
Also
,
i
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 was not happy with my owner, who never treated me well. Recently, I
have
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joined a new company named
as
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, Lally Bros Holding Ltd. in Delta British Columbia. It's a Trucking company. I am working there as an Administrative Assistant which includes
few
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 duties
such
 as, opening
drivers
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drivers'
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 daily paperwork and checking their GPS for the
patroll
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patrol
.
Moreover
, I
also
 help my co-workers
for
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drivers
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 port-pass, when they start working with our company.
This
job
 is really interesting to me as I never get bored and learnt so many computer skills.
Nevertheless
, I'm happy with my earnings too. I am very happy
from
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 my current position and
job
 that I recommend you to
also
 find
a
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work like
this
. I wish to meet with you soon. Lots of love from my side to you, Harpinder
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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