You have recently started working in a new company. write a letter to your friend. In your letter Explain why you changed job discribe your new job tell him/her about other news

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Dear Aman, Hope you are doing well. It's been a long time

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since

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we haven't met

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each other. I received your letter asking about my current work experience. I'm very happy to discuss

about

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my new occupation with you. Actually, I was not satisfied

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with

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my old

job

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as it was

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in a

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restaurant work where I had a lot of stress of doing multitasks

within

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very

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less amount of money. So, after working

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months with them, I

quiet

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the

job

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was not happy with my owner, who never treated me well. Recently, I

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joined a new company named

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, Lally Bros Holding Ltd. in Delta British Columbia. It's a Trucking company. I am working there as an Administrative Assistant which includes

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duties

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as, opening

drivers

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drivers'

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daily paperwork and checking their GPS for the

patroll

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patrol

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, I

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help my co-workers

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applying

drivers

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port-pass, when they start working with our company.

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job

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is really interesting to me as I never get bored and learnt so many computer skills.

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, I'm happy with my earnings too. I am very happy

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my current position and

job

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that I recommend you to

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find

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work like

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. I wish to meet with you soon. Lots of love from my side to you, Harpinder

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

220 words

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You have recently started working in a new company. write a letter to your friend. In your letter Explain why you changed job discribe your new job tell him/her about other news

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In your own opinion, what do you think are the factors that contribute to longevity (living a long time)? List some examples and reasons to support your answer.

Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In the future, all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantagse?

In recent years, there has been a rise in the use of performance-enhancing drugs in sports, What are the consequences of doping for athletes? What measures should be taken to combat this issue?