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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweight the disadvantages?

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In nearest future transportation like cars, buses and trucks will automatically they don't require a human or driver to drive the
vehicles
. Only travellers will travel with these robotic
vehicles
. Here I can say
this
 will more cause disadvantages like issues in the system which lead to dangerous
situations
. Unfortunately, it is all done programmatically so sometimes it can happen that the correct path system can not decide. These are explained
further
 in the essay. On one hand, automatic transportation will be benefited
for
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people
. they will not need to concentrate on driving.
While
,
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 driverless
vehicles
 will help
people
 to do not require to remember the exact location where they want to travel. The machine will have everything built up inside to understand the location which is added by a traveller. On the second hand, these robotic
vehicles
 will lead to more dangerous
situations
, heavy
vehicles
 buses and trucks mostly carrying logistics items and let's suppose, there will unavoidable
situations
 arise it can cause fire and can burn the logistics. So in
this
 case,
people
 who are travelling may need to pay for items
although
 they suffered from dangerous
situations
 as well.
While
 in the car, if
this
 kind of fire situation arises so
vehicles
 will have a security system to lock everything. So
people
 who will travel will not able to move out which causes a major injury.
While
 if
people
 get delayed with work or any emergency
then
 the program will not identify the shortest path to reach quickly. For
this
 kind of ,issues humans need to bar too. In conclusion, I firmly believe that automatic
vehicles
 like cars, buses and trucks will have more disadvantages. Humans will be facing life dangerous issues and sometimes
people
 will getting delay. Along, with automatic ,transportation there is still required a driver who can manage every function manually.
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