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Despite health warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke all over the world. Why should we be concerned about this? What solutions would you suggest?

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Nowadays, society ignores the
health
 alert and
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 not make an attempt to give up smoking, which leads to huge
health
 problems and should be taken into wider consideration. The biggest issue which both passive and active smokers should be worried about is
health
 problems,
such
 as
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 disease and heart illness. Either passive or active smoking causes an extremely serious negative impact on the breathing system and heart beating. Wherever possible, medical institutions or various organisations should make the message clear enough
how
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 disastrous cigarette addiction might be. The other problem, which can't be neglected, it's a bad educational example from adults' side to adolescents. Saying to teenagers that smoking is too bad must be fed with a great example of a non-smoker. To do that, some marathons or activities should be held, involving both parents and their children , with a
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 motto.
To conclude
, people shouldn't neglect solving the smoking issue, which might lead to enormous
health
 concerns and poor educational examples for the next generation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Addiction
  • Cardiovascular disease
  • Chronic obstructive pulmonary disease (COPD)
  • Nicotine
  • Public health initiative
  • Secondhand smoke
  • Substance abuse
  • Tobacco cessation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Social norms
  • Healthcare burden
  • Preventive measures
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