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the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
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The two maps illustrate the
road
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 access to a
city
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 hospital between 2007 and 2010.
It is clear that
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 many facilities improved around the
city
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 hospital including a
bus
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 station,
car
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 parks, and roundabouts. In the past, Ring
Road
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 was around the
city
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 hospital and connected with Hospital
Road
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 in front of the hospital. The staff and public
park
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 were the south of the
city
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 hospital, and the six
bus
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 stops were in front of the
park
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, along Hospital
Road
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.
City
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Road
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 paralleled the
city
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 hospital and connected with Hospital
Road
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 in 2007. In 2010, we can see that the six
bus
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 stops combine into a
bus
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 station located to the west-south of the hospital on Hospital
Road
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. Two roundabouts were constructed on the north and south of Hospital
Road
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 and connected to the
City
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Road
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 and Ring
Road
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. The previous
car
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park
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 remained and was separated from the staff
car
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park
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 and the public
car
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park
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 which was in the east of the hospital on Ring
Road
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.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, bus, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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