The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.

The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.
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The diagram provides data about the sales of different kinds of fruit jams during the
period
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from 2009 to 2014. The strawberry
jam
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had the highest rate in the beginning and maintained its leading position throughout the 5-year
period
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. The grape
jam
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has the lowest rate of sales in 2009, but during the
period
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between 2009 and
2014
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it witnessed a gradual increase, to 3rd place, being replaced by plum in 5th place in 2014. The sales of strawberry
jam
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increased constantly from 3 to 7 in a five-year
period
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. The same trend experienced raspberry with some fluctuations, increasing with two units in the same
period
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of time. The rate of cherry increased slightly with a unit between 2009 and 2014, compared with plum, which experienced a negative trend of 2.5 to 0, being the least sold kind of
jam
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in 2014.
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, it is observed a huge qualitative change in the graph between 2009 and 2014.
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the beginning of the top three were the strawberry, raspberry and plume tastes, the third one being replaced in 2014 with grape
jam
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