happiness is considered very important in life. Some people think happiness is difficult to define. What factors are important in achieving happiness.

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Happiness
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is being treated as an essential factor in
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life.Certain people have their own preferences which are providing
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,cheerfulness is one of the major aspects of well-being.
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to previous
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,huge amounts of material things have been altered.Anyway,the specific views of individuals are remaining unchanged.
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,when humans
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,they begin to explore the environment around them,
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,as people are usually
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in various ways,their conscious viewpoints
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as well.For some types of characters,money is the
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trigger of satisfaction.At the same time,the
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happiness
of another group can be found in little things.
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,a simple Russian villager from the north
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was caught absolutely alone as his children have abandoned him.He
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looked mentally devastated when travellers stumbled on him.As
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with his family seemed
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unsolvable
,the
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just repaired his old car.
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a little feat,both,benefactors and
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man
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saw the beam of hope that
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still able to provoke
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. What concerns natural sources of
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,from my standpoint,liveliness is the straightest way to being happy,as I count
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feeling as contagious in a positive sense.
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,by distributing
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attitudes to others,
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is promised to appear.
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,a bunch of bloggers in Europe have recently established a trend.Shortly,they are simply going for a
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,by putting the energetic songs on high volume and dancing,they call residents to dance as well.Admittedly,the
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they have created has only positive sides. To wrap up,if people are struggling
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to find joy,even
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in things can cheer them up.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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