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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advanced technology which can prevent and solve crime.

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These days, compared to the past, the level of crime is declining because of new innovations which help with preventing and solving felonies. The technologies that can easily find a culprit and capture offences.
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, numerous petty issues
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 are recorded by advanced inventions, resulting in complaints among several groups of people. I strongly agree with the statement and in
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 essay, I will support my point of view.
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, humanity has come
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 far that the security system works perfectly. As an example, when somebody robs a house, the signalization detects him, calls the police and notifies the owners.
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, the accident will be averted before something not good could have happened. To compare, previously, the owners of small businesses had to guard their offices by themselves in case an unknown person would try to sneak inside.
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, when I was 5 years old, my dad opened a microcredits company.
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 he was able to hire guys for monitoring the object, the world is cruel and you can’t trust anybody, so he stayed at work at night, changing with my uncle. That’s why technologies helped him to protect his business, or at least sleep well.
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, artificial intelligence can collect all data about the culprit’s face, fingertips and etc.,
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 connect it with individuals. To be exact, if a person was caught on camera or a weapon was touched, the computer will determine who it was and provide you with information about him, resulting in an investigation being fast and accurate.
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, I’ve read about a case, where the police had a suspect, but they didn’t have enough evidence because the camera hadn’t captured the face.
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, it recorded the way he walking, so investigators brought a device
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 able to analyze the gait of the suspect and the criminal from the video. Surprisingly, it worked, and the perpetrator was uncovered. All in all, as I see it, the innovations have brought a positive effect by making our lives safer and doing impressive work, finding bad guys.
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 advanced technology has improved security systems
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 dropped the crime rate.
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, it is hard to imagine how people lived in the past without useful gadgets.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance systems
  • CCTV cameras
  • forensic technology
  • crime scene analysis
  • conviction rates
  • data analytics
  • predictive policing
  • high-risk areas
  • cybersecurity measures
  • cybercrime
  • sensitive information
  • social media
  • online platforms
  • emergencies
  • law enforcement response
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