More and more fathers are taking a break from their careers, so that they can stay home and take care of their children while their wives work. This is better for the family than having both paretns work full time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The number of fathers taking some rest from their careers to stay back at home and look after their kids
while
the mothers
work
has been on the rise, many believe that
this
is better for the family than having both
parents
work
full time. I completely agree with
this
opinion.
Firstly
, a
child
is not self-dependent and needs an elder to look after them. If both
parents
have gone out for
work
they usually appoint a babysitter to take care of their children not only does
this
make them miss their development stages but
also
the
child
's first moments.
For instance
, supposedly the kid is of 3 years and has been left with a babysitter, and the
parents
will miss out on the cute little things a 3-year-old tends to do.
Instead
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they will be experienced by the person looking after the
child
.
Hence
, in the
future
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the
parents
won't have the memories of the things the adult used to do as a
child
.
Secondly
, the
child
fails to connect on an emotional level with the
parents
if they are not around in their growing years. Like any other human
being
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even children need constant emotional support and connection from their loved ones, when both
parents
work
full time they are not able to provide their kid with it.
For example
, when a
child
has participated in the school's annual day and on the day of the event if the
parents
are not present because they were working, the kid will be left heartbroken and disappointed. When
such
trends continue to happen the
child
grows distant from their mother and father. In conclusion, it is good for the family to have one parent working part-time as by doing so they are able to provide their children with the emotional support needed in their growing years by being around.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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