Success is often measured by wealth and material possessions. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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In
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highly materialistic society that we live in now. Many
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claim that financial status and material possessions are the standards for measuring a person’s success. I believe that success has nothing to do with wealth, happiness is the only right sign to define the achievement of individuals. On the one hand, nowadays, we are living a computer-generated
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. It is true that wealthy
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are often seen as successful.
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, I disagree that an individual’s achievements are defined by their
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how much they earn or the other prospects in their
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since
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can not buy happiness.
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, it is common knowledge that
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coming from
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normally struggle to maintain relationships with their family members and friends as their work.
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, it can usually lead to lonely lives, some of them do not socialize sufficiently for years and often are secluded in nature.
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,
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who are successful always suffer from poor health since they spend a large proportion of time working on themselves and making as much profit as possible they can.
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is because they do not spend time on personal well-being.
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, it causes several health problems
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as anxiety, depression and too much stress. The more they are extremely dedicated to working without thinking about their health, the more they will be stressed and feel more depressed.
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, rich celebrities who live in a mansion, drive expensive cars, wear luxury clothes, and live in fancy and extraordinary houses, are still yet they depressed and feel lonely as well.
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,
it is clear that
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material belongings are not the key factor to a successful and happy
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.
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, other elements play a vital role
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as healthy relationships with their cloth
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and work-
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balance.
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, a person who has a supportive family and friends when they come across ups and downs, that time their family support them throughout hardships and is content with their
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, is highly likely to have a happy
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. In conclusion,
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we live in a world where how wealthier a person define his level of achievement, I totally disagree with
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viewpoint that
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can not bring a happier
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and it comes down with happiness without a second thought which may be reached with essential parts
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as healthy relationships and balance of work.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Affluence
  • Materialism
  • Fulfillment
  • Well-being
  • Philanthropy
  • Societal norms
  • Personal growth
  • Economic power
  • Subjective
  • Humanitarian
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