The following pie charts show the results of a survey into the most popular leisure activities in the United States of America in 1999 and 2009

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leisure activities in the United States of America in 1999 and 2009.

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, the category Walking is the most popular hobby, which a percentage of 29% and 31% in either year. The second most well-known exercise is Soccer. Even ,more it is nearly the same results which were played by approximately 17% of people and 18% from both centuries, but

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increased the percentage of itself .

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differed between the increasing number of probabilities in 2009 and 1990 that Swimming, Yoga and weightlifting.

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aerobics, jogging and biking had declined dramatically. Despite the changes

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, only camping had not changed much, which were enjoyed by 8% of people in 1999,

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9% of them in 2009.

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, walking and soccer are always fascinating activities for many people in both periods.

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the rest of the sports

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as aerobics, running and bicycling varied in their percentages between 1999 and 2010

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some showed an increasing trend

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others showed the opposite.

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The following pie charts show the results of a survey into the most popular leisure activities in the United States of America in 1999 and 2009

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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