The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030
A glance at the graph provided reveals some
informations
about the Change the wording
information
pieces of information
amount
of energy consumed in the USA from 1980 and prediction
of the Correct article usage
the prediction
amount
Change preposition
of consumption
consumption
in the future until 2030.
Replace the word
consumed
According to
the graph consumption
of petrol and oil has increased from 1980 to recent years from 35 quadrillion units
and also
predicted,this
amount
will rise dramatically to somewhere at
the vicinity of 50 quadrillion Change preposition
in
units
.National gas during this
decades
has fluctuated from 20 Fix the agreement mistake
decade
units
in 1980 to about 25 units
in 2015 and then
this
pattern will remain until 2030.In the contrast,this
pattern for the consumption
of coal is reverse
,Wrong verb form
reversed
it
means coal Correct pronoun usage
which
consumption
from 16 units
from 1980 will increase gradually untill2030
.
Meanwhile,other Correct your spelling
until 2030
further
points that highlighted
by the figure Add a missing verb
are highlighted
is
, the Correct subject-verb agreement
are
consumption
of Nuclear,Solar/Wind and Hydropower has striking similarities in their trends.this
amount
for all of them started with 4 units
in 1980 and then
has
marginally rose till 1990.Unnecessary verb
apply
This
trend countinued
up to these days and will remain Correct your spelling
continued
continues
untill
2030 just Correct your spelling
until
low
of 5 Correct article usage
a low
units
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