The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030
A glance at the graph provided reveals some
informations
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about the
amount
of energy consumed in the USA from 1980 and
prediction
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the prediction
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of the
amount
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consumption
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in the future until 2030.
According to
the graph
consumption
of petrol and oil has increased from 1980 to recent years from 35 quadrillion
units
and
also
predicted,
this
amount
will rise dramatically to somewhere
at
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the vicinity of 50 quadrillion
units
.National gas during
this
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has fluctuated from 20
units
in 1980 to about 25
units
in 2015 and
then
this
pattern will remain until 2030.In the contrast,
this
pattern for the
consumption
of coal is
reverse
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,
it
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means coal
consumption
from 16
units
from 1980 will increase gradually
untill2030
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until 2030
. Meanwhile,other
further
points that
highlighted
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by the figure
is
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, the
consumption
of Nuclear,Solar/Wind and Hydropower has striking similarities in their trends.
this
amount
for all of them started with 4
units
in 1980 and
then
has
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marginally rose till 1990.
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trend
countinued
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continued
continues
up to these days and will remain
untill
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until
2030 just
low
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a low
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of 5
units
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, consumption, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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