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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030
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A glance at the graph provided reveals some
informations
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information
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 about the
amount
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 of energy consumed in the USA from 1980 and
prediction
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the prediction
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 of the
amount
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of consumption
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consumption
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consumed
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 in the future until 2030.
According to
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 the graph
consumption
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 of petrol and oil has increased from 1980 to recent years from 35 quadrillion
units
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 and
also
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 predicted,
this
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amount
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 will rise dramatically to somewhere
at
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in
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 the vicinity of 50 quadrillion
units
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.National gas during
this
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decades
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 has fluctuated from 20
units
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 in 1980 to about 25
units
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 in 2015 and
then
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this
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 pattern will remain until 2030.In the contrast,
this
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 pattern for the
consumption
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 of coal is
reverse
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reversed
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,
it
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which
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 means coal
consumption
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 from 16
units
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 from 1980 will increase gradually
untill2030
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until 2030
. Meanwhile,other
further
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 points that
highlighted
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are highlighted
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 by the figure
is
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are
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, the
consumption
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 of Nuclear,Solar/Wind and Hydropower has striking similarities in their trends.
this
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amount
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 for all of them started with 4
units
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 in 1980 and
then
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has
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apply
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marginally rose till 1990.
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 trend
countinued
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continued
continues
 up to these days and will remain
untill
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until
 2030 just
low
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a low
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 of 5
units
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, consumption, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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