some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some infomation is too important or too valueable to be shared freely.
It is believed
that
by several Correct word choice
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people
that sharing as a great deal of info as possible is beneficial in scientific research, work life
and academic area whereas
the rest advocate not to share
information
as they are excessively significant and precious according to
them.
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apply
Information
is precious in the world. All people
spend time and money for
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on
information
all life
. According to
one reason, this
knowledge acquired throughout life
should share
other
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with other
people
and the knowledge increase as we share
about such
as technologic, academic
. Correct word choice
and academic
For example
, companies like Tesla and Apple, make useful devices and make easier of
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for
people
life
. and also
academic
world Correct article usage
the academic
improve
kind of various types.
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improves
On the other hand
, the rest advocate should not think to share
info with humanity. Some information
is too valuable and can’t share
because some people
don’t know the purpose and the importance of sharing information
. For illustrate, terrorists can harm people
by bomb-making videos on the internet. In addition
, famous
restaurant gives their Add an article
the famous
a famous
burger’s
recipe Change noun form
burger
other opponent restaurant
can Change the wording
another opponent restaurant
other opponent restaurants
be use
the recipe and make Change the verb form
use
better
than Correct pronoun usage
it better
famous
restaurant. I think no one would like to Add an article
a famous
the famous
share
this
valuable information
for free.
In conclusion, information
and data have become the most valuable mean in day-to-day life
in the recent present. It is beneficial to share
as much information
as possible in some fields while
every
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all
information
cannot to
be easy to find in certain areas. Fix the infinitive
apply
However
, it should be handled with care and I believe that sharing materials should only use for the development of the
society Correct article usage
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and
the above-mentioned points could assist my opinion.Correct word choice
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