Many people nowadays fo not feel safe either when they are at home or go out. What are the reasons and what can be done to solve this problem?

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unsafe either when they are at home or not. From my personal point of view, the reason is because
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increase in criminal
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of news
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the internet and social media regarding illegal activities, they became more aware of its negative impact on their
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parents
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always keep an eye on their children whether at school or
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up the law and
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regarding
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to decrease as patrols are
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residential area.
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without any
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. To recapitulate, criminal
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a serious issue
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life. The best approach to deal with it
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to educate
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about its damaging
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for the government to increase law or fine.
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concrete
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to reduce the
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it is having on current society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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