Many people nowadays fo not feel safe either when they are at home or go out. What are the reasons and what can be done to solve this problem?

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of society today
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unsafe either when they are at home or not. From my personal point of view, the reason is because
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high
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criminal
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rate.
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, the government should tighten the regulation in order to solve
this
issue.
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this
problem
as well as
an effective solution and
thus
will lead to a logical conclusion. In regard to
this
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citizens
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afraid
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is
due to
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increase in criminal
cases
. As they saw
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of news
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the internet and social media regarding illegal activities, they became more aware of its negative impact on their
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.
For example
, children kidnapping
cases
recently are very cruel which in some
cases
turn into death.
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, most
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parents
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always keep an eye on their children whether at school or
otherwise
. Seeing the problem with a brighter mind, many solutions can be helpful to curb
this
menace. One of the best
solution
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is
by
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tighten
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up the law and
regulation
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regarding
criminal
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the criminal
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issue
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. When
law
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are implement
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,
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villain
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afraid to make chaos in the city and harm
people
or public
properties
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.
For instance
, in America,
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robbery
cases
seems
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to decrease as patrols are
oftenly
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often
made by police
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in
the
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residential area.
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,
people
will live
in
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peaceful
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without any
distraction
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. To recapitulate, criminal
cases
is
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a serious issue
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because
it
cause
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harmful
effect
on
people
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life. The best approach to deal with it
are
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to educate
people
about its damaging
effect
and
thus
for the government to increase law or fine.
Although
the
effect
is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term, there
are
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concrete
step
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steps
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to reduce the
effect
it is having on current society.
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