Many people nowadays fo not feel safe either when they are at home or go out. What are the reasons and what can be done to solve this problem?

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Many people nowadays fo not feel safe either when they are at home or go out. What are the reasons and what can be done to solve this problem?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people like to work in teams. Others prefer to work alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Examine the arguments in favour of and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue.

Human activity has had a negative effect on ecosystems, animals and plants across the world. Some people believe this cannot be changes while others feel that we can still take action protect living things and the environment. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Childhood obesity has become a serious problem in recent years. What are the primary causes of this? What measures should be taken to reduce childhood obesity? (Write 250 words.)