Some people say that school should reward students who show the best academic results, while other believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Providing
students
with incentives is bound to produce results but the question is whether our pedagogical approach should emphasize improvements or absolute success. We could reward those who are at the top of the class already or those who are slowly trying to make their way there.
This
essay will focus on the pros and cons of both points. Let us first take a look at the former option which is rewarding the position holders. By enriching
students
that are already at the top, we at the very least ensure that they maintain their academic performance and that others are urged to fill their positions to receive the reward.
However
, the main disadvantage is that it would mean that those that are at the bottom have no reason to try better because for them to get to the top positions is like climbing a steep mountain which they probably wouldn't even bother to do.
Furthermore
, it's not reasonable to expect
this
out of them. Now
on the other hand
, if we were to push
students
to not focus on the top but
instead
reward their every single step in climbing that mountain, that will have a positive impact on their mental psych and reduce their stress. Sometimes stress among
students
can have detrimental consequences
hence
we should try to protect our pupils mentally too.
This
approach ensures that everyone gives their best
instead
of just a select few. I personally see no downside or drawback to
this
path. In conclusion, I think keeping everyone on equal footing meaning rewarding
students
simply for trying their best is the better approach
however
both methods do have their merits.
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