The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The assigned map charts illustrate the information about the site of a

school

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in 2004 and the plan for changes to the

school

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site in 2024.

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, it is lucid that, the site of

this

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school

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has vast change in the given period. At a fleeting glance, it is crystal clear that

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apply

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the north-east side of the

school

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had sports field in 2004.

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in 2024, it would

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be converted

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into the

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school

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School

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Building 3 and

also

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develop parking space 2 and a sports field.

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the northwest side, it was

school

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building 1, car parking and

main

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the main

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entrence

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entrance

in the 21st century .

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, in the future , it would remain the same . In the

past

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merely 600 students had studied in

this

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school

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scrutinizing the map. in the middle east-wast side, it was

path

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a path

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and

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school

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a school

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building 2. whilst, it would remain stable, in the 21st century and they

also

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built a road. After that, in the east-south, the 21st century, it had a huge forest.

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, in the future, it would not change . It was interesting to note that the number of students would increase

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1000 in the future 2024.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

199 words

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The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some believe that people today have no interests in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.