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The diagram which illustrates processes of the life cycle of a species of large fish named the salmon.

The diagram which illustrates processes of the life cycle of a species of large fish named the salmon.
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The assigned natural
process
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 illustrates the information about the processes of the life cycle of a large
fish
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 which name is the
salmon
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.
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, it is a natural
process
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,
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 and has several stages. The
process
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 of large
fish
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salmon
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 starts from the development
from
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of
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eggs
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 to mature
fish
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. At a fleeting glance. it is crystal clear that in the first
stage
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, the life cycle of
salmon
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fish
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 lay
eggs
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 inside the reeds and
eggs
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 are very small like
a stones
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. It is found
the
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in the
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 upper river, which is moved slowly and they stay their around 5 to 6 months . In the second
stage
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, the fry
found
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 in the lower river, which is flowing very fast, they live for 4 years and the size of the fry is approximately 3 to 8 cm.
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process
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, in the third
stage
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 they become smolt and their size is about 12 to 15 cm. After that, the smolt goes to the open sea . In the following
stage
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, these smolts later become adult
salmon
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 within 5 years and their size is increased
nearly
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by nearly
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 70 to 76 cm.
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 , the
fish
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 again lay
eggs
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 and
this
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process
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 starts from the beginning .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, fish, salmon, eggs, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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