The diagram which illustrates processes of the life cycle of a species of large fish named the salmon.
The assigned natural
process
illustrates the information about the processes of the life cycle of a large fish
which name is the salmon
.
Overall
, it is a natural process
,
and has several stages. The Remove the comma
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process
of large fish
salmon
starts from the development from
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of
eggs
to mature fish
.
At a fleeting glance. it is crystal clear that in the first stage
, the life cycle of salmon
fish
lay eggs
inside the reeds and eggs
are very small like a stones
. It is found Correct the article-noun agreement
a stone
stones
the
upper river, which is moved slowly and they stay their around 5 to 6 months . In the second Change preposition
in the
stage
, the fry found
in the lower river, which is flowing very fast, they live for 4 years and the size of the fry is approximately 3 to 8 cm.
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are found
Further
scrutinizing the process
, in the third stage
they become smolt and their size is about 12 to 15 cm. After that, the smolt goes to the open sea . In the following stage
, these smolts later become adult salmon
within 5 years and their size is increased nearly
70 to 76 cm. Change preposition
by nearly
Finally
, the fish
again lay eggs
and this
process
starts from the beginning .Submitted by daljeetchanna93 on
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