Writing a letter to manager for computer system problem

Dear Sir I am writing
this
letter regarding computer system difficulties which occurs in
this
week.
Also
, It causes delays in our daily office activities.
To begin
, Our associates complain that when they tried to log in on a computer, the screen stuck in the same position for an hour and as a
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result they faced issues before starting work and customers felt frustrated
due to
long waiting periods.
Secondly
, I face a few glitches in the system
such
as when I tried to refund an item
then
it shows that I already did it.
However
, customers complained that they did not receive an email about their money which result in an argument .
Lastly
, I have difficulties with a sound system like a voice is low and when customers call us, I didn't hear the voice properly and as a ,result our pre-subs become lower. I hope you solve my problem as soon as possible. Yours faithfully Raman
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