the parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her.

#parents #australian #friend #chris #surprise #birthday #party

Dear Mr and Mrs Collins,   I really thank you for inviting me to a surprise

birthday

party for Chris. As he is turning 20, the party must have much more meaning for him and your family.

Furthermore

, Chris is the guy who always enjoys something unexpected, so he is definitely going to enjoy the party which you are preparing.   Even though I fully appreciate that

this

birthday

has special meaning for my friend, Unfortunately, I’m afraid to say that I can not make it

this

time.

That is

because I have to attend a conference held abroad. As a junior engineer, I must attend to support my colleagues because

this

is a pivotal event for my company.   Actually, I have already made another plan for celebrating his 20th

birthday

, which is a short trip to the USA. We will meet in New York and stay for a couple of days there, visiting some famous art galleries that he has really wanted to visit.   I feel sad that I can not spend time with your family on his

birthday

, but I hope that everyone, especially Chris, will have fun and unforgettable moments.    Kind regards,   Jeongseo Choi.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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the parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her.

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