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Biotechnology companies all over the world are developing differnt types of genetically modified crops. However, not enough is known about theses crops on our health and the environment. Interfering with nature in this way should be prohibitted. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there is an ongoing debate about the safety of genetically modified products.
While
 food production companies are busy
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inventing various genetically engineered products.
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 seed and agrochemical companies are busy
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inventing various genetically modified crops , there is a lack of scientifically
proved
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 evidence on
environmental
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 and health impact of the latter.
Therefore
, some people argue that interference
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structure
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 of the plants should be restricted.
This
 essay will attempt to agree with
this
 point of view by providing solid reasons. It is generally known that
primarally
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primarily
 the need in producing genetically engineered fruits, vegetables and crops appeared
due to
 commercial purposes. Agricultural businesses wanted to produce higher
yeilds
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yields
 with less usage of pesticides.
As a result
, bioengineers invented insect-resistant and
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 plants.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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