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Despite helath warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke all over the world. What are the possible reasons for this ? Suggest some solutions to address this problem.

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It has been observed that a multitude of
people
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 are indulged in smoking all around the world,
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 it is detrimental to their health. A person starts smoking because of many reasons like peer pressure and to cope with stress in life, but
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 can lead to serious health consequences. I shall try to delve deeper into
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 discourse and suggest some ideas to alleviate the problem. On the one hand, smoking has become a pernicious habit of many inhabitants of all countries. Many
people
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 start smoking at a very young age
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 peer pressure. It has been seen that teenagers who have friends that smoke are more likely to start smoking than those who do not because they feel it is cool to smoke and
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 they do not want to stand out.
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, many
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 smoke because they feel
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 is a good way to combat all sorts of stress in their lives.
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, Nicotine present in
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 cigarettes reaches the brain very rapidly and renders the release of Adrenaline in the body, which triggers the body's fight response and provides a boost in energy level,
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 helping in overcoming stress.
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, media and movies influence youngsters.
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, when they watch their favourite celebrities smoking in the movies, they start imitating their footsteps.
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, the
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 should take some stringent measures to ban advertisements related to
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 smoking. The
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 industry spends a lot of money on celebrity endorsements to promote their product.
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, they show that smoking is safe, cool and glamorous in the ads.The concerned
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 department should increase the tax on cigarettes.
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, Finland's
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 prohibited smoking in public areas.
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 opening de-addiction centres in the city,
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 must be made cognizant of the ramifications of
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 smoking by launching awareness programmes, they should be informed that consumption of
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 in any way, either orally or intravenously, can cause oral cancer
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 lung cancer. To summarize, it is discernible that smoking is deleterious, yet many
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 fall prey to smoking.
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,
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 and non-governmental organisations should conduct campaigns to make
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 aware of the ill effects of smoking.
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