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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally discuss both side and give your opinion

#people #scale #side
Are you think we are
along
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 in the
environment
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environmental
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 problems and will be able to solve them individually? It is taught by some individuals that
environment
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environmental
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 issues
oughtbto
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ought to
 be overcome
in
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on
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global
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a global
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 scale
while
 others believe that we can solve them as individual Nations without interacting with each
others
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other
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 On the one hand with the development of
industrial
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the industrial
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world
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,world
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 we are facing numerous
ecological
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environmental
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 problems
such
 as global warming, loss of biodiversity rise of
the
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apply
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sea levels and health problems. The major reasons behind
this
 are using fossil fuels and emission of greenhouse gases,
over use
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 of resources and lack of Sustainable
environment
 and policies.
Majority
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 of
developed
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the developed
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country
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countries
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 used much of resources in the past and did not
considered
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 the
bat
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bad
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 effects on
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 even though now most of them focus
in
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on
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 green policies. Because of that they cannot put
same
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the same
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 effort as other
countries
 in the
world
 and should pay their price for development. As developing
countries
 still use
lot
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 of degradable fuel sources and cost numerous
problem
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problems
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 to the
world
 the
countries
 who own
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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 technologies should share those technologies to make
world
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the world
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better
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a better
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 place.
On the other hand
, some
problem
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problems
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such
 as disposing or recycling
the
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garbage,
over use
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overuse
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 of land and resources in it,
disposal
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and disposal
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 of chemical
wastage
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waste
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 should be solved
in
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at
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national
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the national
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 level as local
government
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governments
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 are responsible for
decision making
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decision-making
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 and
adapting
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adopting
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 green policies. Individuals who are lived in
country
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the country
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 have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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 to select
good
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a good
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leader
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leaders
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 who
are
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 interested in making
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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 legislation. In conclusion, even though each and every
countries
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country
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 should be engaged in their role to protect
environment
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the environment
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, in my opinion, I believe that developed nations who are owned modern technologies should come frontline to
sve
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save
world
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the world
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 as if we
loose
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this
 battle all people in the
world
 have to suffer bad consequences.
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