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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures illustrate information about the
reasons
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 why people choose to cycle or drive to
work
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. Units are measured by
percentage
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. As can be seen from the pie charts, health and fitness and
also
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 less pollution are responsible for the main factors of people who choose cycling to
work
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.
Moreover
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, the most significant
percentage
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 of driving to
work
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 is allocated to comfort.
In particular
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, almost the same
percentage
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 of people prefer cycling or driving because of their speed. The most significant proportion of
reasons
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 for driving to
work
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, 40%, is used for comfort. Followed by distance to
work
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 which accounts for 18% less.
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, the lowest
percentage
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 of
reasons
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 belongs to safer than cycling which is 11%.
On the other hand
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, health and fitness and
also
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 less pollution are responsible for the largest number of
reasons
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 for cycling to
work
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 at 30%. The other reason
that is
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 no parking problems allocated 15% which is twice less than less pollution and health and fitness. The figure for faster than driving is 12% and there is no significant difference between the figure for driving to
work
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 which is 11%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, work, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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