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some people believe it is better to raise their children in the city, while others consider the countryside to be a more suitable choise. discuss both views and giv your opinion

#people #children #city #countryside #choise #giv
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high standard
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 environment for children to grow up
was
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in was
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 a place for argument by
expert
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experts
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. One side believed that
city
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the city
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 is better than
village
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the village
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while
other
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the other
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disagree
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. In
this
essay
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 both views will
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discussed
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 with my personal opinion.
Firstly
, there is no doubt that deciding where
child
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a child
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raise
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raised
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 will definitely play
critical
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 role in
term
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 of personality and academic succussed in future.
Therefore
made
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decision
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a decision
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where
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about where
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 to live is important.
Regrading
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 to that people group into two categories one that
prefer
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prefers
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 countryside
while
 other the opposite.
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 with
first
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 side, people tend to decide
village
 over
city
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the city
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in
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for
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purpose
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the purpose
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 of safety and
sense
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a sense
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 of
community
 which is not likely to be seen in
city
 life. Countryside
environment
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environments
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 usually have small
community
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communities
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 everybody each other and willing to help which gave the child as grow up
sense
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a sense
the sense
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 of responsibility and long year
friendship
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friendships
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which
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apply
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in order
provide
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stable
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a stable
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 system The
advanced
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 in technological education tools and on other hand would be
reason
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the reason
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 why people tend to the
city
 option.
City
school
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schools
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 provide
wide
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a wide
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 range of
option
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options
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 and give
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to kids to connect with
university
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universities
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unlike
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,unlike
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 small
town
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towns
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.
In addition
, the kids
able
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are able
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 to contact and experience
with
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apply
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multicultural
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a multicultural
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environment
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environments
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 which could
be consider
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be considered
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as
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an
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advantage
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 when
comparing
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compared
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 with
village
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the village
a village
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 in my opinion.
Moreover
,
city
 kids will be able to connect to the real world and gain more skills in
term
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terms
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 of social skills,
soft
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and soft
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 skills which can be hard in
city
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the city
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due to
 the fact that usually small
community
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communities
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 do not have.
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,
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in programing
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programing
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programming
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 skill in
city
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the city
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 there is
many
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 competition for that in order to encourage
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 to improve it
following
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followed
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 with a much more
club
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clubs
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 to meet with advanced
programmer
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programmers
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 and
share
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shared
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experience
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experiences
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 which could be hard and impossible in
countryside
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the countryside
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 due
the
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to the
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 fact that
number
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the number
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 of
school
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schools
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 in
most
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a most
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 case under five.In my opinion,
although
small
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a small
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community
its
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is
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good
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a good
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 option for
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a family
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family
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families
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 especially
in
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at
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 young age
however
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,however
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, in
future
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the future
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 term
city
 life is more suitable. In conclusion, parents tend to
city
 for the wide range of
solution
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solutions
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 like advanced
system
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systems
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 and open culture
while
 folks
who's prefer
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who prefer
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village
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a village
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 for safety
purpose
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purposes
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as well as
 the sense of
community
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