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Some people believe that secondary school children should study international news as a subject. Others say that this is wasting time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Unquestionably, every coin has two sides and so are the
people
. Society’s
people
 are divided into two groups and
therefore
, including international news as a subject at secondary school has become a topic of debate among
people
.
This
 essay will compare and contrast both of the opinions
along with
 my opinion which is in the favour of former view will be discussed in a sensible conclusion. Initiating with the points supporting the first school of thought,
firstly
,
due to
 globalization the
world
 has become a global village so one should know what is happening around the
world
. The
people
 who support
this
 say that the Hong Kong government introducing national and international news as a subject at schools gave positive results.
Secondly
, the younger generation will know how the
world
 is evolving and learn about the opportunities outside. In fact, having
this
 knowledge at an early age helps them to set their goals. On the contrasting side,
people
 who held another viewpoint say that international matters would be too much for tiny brains. They believe that children should focus on academic subjects.
Moreover
, the present curriculum itself is heavy to complete, so they should not be overloaded with international news
instead
 youth should be encouraged to involve in physical activities which give them good health.
To conclude
, I would like to say that, knowing national and international affairs at an early age is required in
this
 fast-paced
world
 .
However
, it will depend upon the mindsets of the
people
 which view they are in favour of.
Submitted by janardhan.gangineni on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broaden horizons
  • cultures
  • global issues
  • critical thinking
  • engaged citizens
  • activism
  • interconnected
  • curriculum
  • workloads
  • bias
  • core subjects
  • career prospects
  • informed
  • global citizens
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