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The pursuit of wealth has become the main motivation for many business owners nowadays. Do you think this is is a positive or negative development?

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Everyone has different thoughts, prejudices and views, but they all have one thing in common they want happiness like having a successful career, having a lot of money, living in luxury, etc. Of them, the primary motivation of business people is wealth, earning a lot of cash, so it is a common belief that
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 is good for developing the industry field and increasing self-worth. In my perspective, it is
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 limited by intentional illegal acts. On the one hand, the tendency to want to get rich through a company
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 brings positive effects because it makes society constantly innovate and develop well. It stems from the owner's desire to get rich through the success of their firm, which
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 means that they must take new steps to make their enterprise massive and more advanced.
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, as a business considers and maximizes profits to help the company expand rapidly, cash flows increase and hire more workers and grow scale.
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, the desire to be rich can lead to rising financial crimes
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 as extortion, bribery, stealing, etc.
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, people can be instigated to circumvent laws like anti-corruption, and personal taxes, basically only to have more funds if they are too focused on enriching themselves illegally. It can be seen through the study of economic growth in many Asian countries as one moves to a free market system,
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 the desire to get rich becoming widespread, but the number of violations increases significantly.
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 broke the old order system and disrupted the economic evolution of these countries. In summary,
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 there are benefits to business owners pursuing wealth, there are more downsides to focusing solely on making money.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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