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In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case. Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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People
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 in some countries consider owning a
home
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 to be more important than renting
a
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one.
This
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 the positive effect. The two main reasons
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 ignoring a rental
home
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 are
high
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the high
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 cost
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of what
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what
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that
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 they have to pay monthly and not having a settlement
their
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in their
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 life. Most
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the
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people
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 invest their money in housing
loan
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 to get a
home
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 of their own. It is a large investment for them,
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,
people
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 have to pay rent
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 their whole lifetime.
Also
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,
people
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 can save
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time
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on
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searching
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the
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a
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 rental
home
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 because the rental
home
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 can buy for
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 constant
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 period.
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,
people
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 have to pay
advance
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in advance
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 for their rental
home
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, and they cannot move without completing the contract
time
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 period.
People
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 fail to change their
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home
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homes
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for
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to
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 their preference in
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time
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 period.
However
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, some countries have more benefits, if
people
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 own a
home
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 for them. As an example,
Sri
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in Sri
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 Lanka, most
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the
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school is considered
a
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permanent address
to
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 getting a school. Comparatively, owning a
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 has more advantages
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 as stability of life after getting older
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reduction
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a reduction
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 of expenses.
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, after becoming above 60 ages,
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included
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to
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 the workforce cannot afford rental expenses.
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, it helps to keep
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mental health rather than searching and moving to
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 rental
home
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in
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 a whole lifetime.
To sum up
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,
people
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 get social and lifetime savings by having a
home
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 for them
instead
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 of wasting their money and
time
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for
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 expenditures.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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