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Some believe that pupils should be given less homework, others say the opposite. What is your opinion?

#believe #pupils #homework
It is argued that teachers in
school
 should give less homework to students. In my opinion, the education system must include home
assignment
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,
however
, nowadays
in
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schools
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school
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 there are provided many subjects and many more extra exercises that significantly influence pupils' prosperity. In many countries, students are expected to study after
school
 in order to keep up with their classes. They are
also
 given advanced assignments to develop their skills in Maths,
Literatures
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 or Foreign Languages. Because of the
school
's workload, these students may not have
time
 to join
after
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school
 activities
such
 as playing sports, music or performing arts.
This
 way of teaching may result in a high number of stress and a lack of social ability. Young people spend the main part of their leisure
time
 doing homework which deprives them to have
a
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free fun
time
. It stifles them.
Moreover
, many mental problems are triggered by permanent fatigue,
such
 as burnout or depression.
On the other hand
, to achieve perfection in any area practice is a must.
Therefore
, doing homework after
lecture
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 enables one to develop skills and contribute to better learning.
Instead
 of draining hours watching television or scrolling the website, spending
time
 on constructive work is advised. In conclusion, I would like to say that home assignment is a crucial part of learning materials, but the consequences of a huge amount of tasks have a detrimental impact towards pupils' health and prosperity.
It should
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 be considered
to find
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 a way how to provide young people with qualitative knowledge without harm as a top priority.
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